Hey, thanks for your critique. I'll be sure to work on it after I finish posting all of the story.

Wow,

I didn't realize you just joined. You crit. like an old pro. Welcome to Scrib.

-Ben

Thanks for reading MSI. You have some very good suggestions. I tried to squeeze alot into the little space and didn't even have time for a second read through, but you all found much more than I would have.

This is my fun piece. That is, I plan (or more like intend, it's too casual to be a plan) to just have fun and play with it. I think I will edit it once (using your great suggestions) and then fly off to another chapter of the serial. I'm hoping it will get me over my fear of long works.

Anyway that's probably too much information for me. What I wanted to say was: Thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

-Ben

Thank you, you are awesome! Very good critique. Now you just have to put up some work and we'll be set.

how cool! jenn rocks.
*pauses to consider*
oh, no!
no pressure or anything, right?
well, get on the stick with the publishing and i'll happily read your stuff. *thumbs up*

hi, rue--
welcome!
i just finished reading your critique of circus' 'faith', and am glad to find someone else shares my thinking on the piece, and her writing overall--thanks for that! (she's one of my favorite writers and i'm always happy when someone else discovers her work.)
i'm not sure if you focus on poetry or fiction, but if you're interested, one of the site writing circles (furious flash fiction fridays) has been active and valuable to me as a reader and writer--weekly flash fiction and a couple quality critiques?? i'm betting you'd rock.
ben jacobson runs the circle, and would love to find new blood (so to speak). maybe check it out?

Welcome to scribophile!