Hey, I'm waiting for another Chapter in Orphans. I need a good read. It's not nice to be so mean to your fans...

Thanks for your comments Russell. Lots of helpful input. I've actually re-written Winter Hunt in first person from the POV of the vampire. Everyone seems to indicate the story needs a bit more mystery/edge to it and I think the change of voice might do it. Always a pleasure hearing from you!

Your critique definitely helped. It seems you and I come from two different schools of thought on writing, but I think that's absolutely wonderful. I really enjoy and need someone to break down my work for me. It helped a lot. Thanks!

Hey, thanks a bunch for the critique. It was truly the first serious critique my work has gotten. You got to the point and I will soon be working like crazy to try and make this piece better. Thanks.

I did read chapter one, just to make sure I wasn't missing something. It wouldn't be fair to critique your chapter and say something like "where did that come from?" when clearly it was in the preceeding chapter.

Thanks Russell, for taking a look at my little story.

Hey, Russell. It's been a while since I've been on, so I was thrilled to see not one, but two reviews from you. Thank you so much. As usual, you gave excellent advice. I promise, I'll get to Chapter 5 as soon as I get my computers back on track. I'm out of coins until payday when I plan on purchasing my membership, but I have a few questions I'd value your opinion on. Until then, do I understand that you are a candidate for USC. From what I understand, out here, is that it's a pretty big deal. Congratulations!

Hello! When you have time please read, The Boys of Summer -and tell me what you think.

Thanks again for your critique. I always love reading it and I was just about to re-edit chapter 2 when I noticed you left it. I thought I should tell you what the Reject Hotline is. Where I live (which is where Fred lives, too), there's a number -I don't know what it is, but my cousin has it on speed dial- and it's called the Reject Hotline. If you have an insistent girl or guy after you and you're seriously NOT interested, but they seriously DON'T get it, you give them this number and tell them it's yours. The Reject Hotline is a recording that tells the caller different reasons why he/she is a reject and recieved the number. It's actually really funny, my cousin had me listen to it once. I don't know the actual number, but the reason I had Fred recite it was because 1) at the time, it was NaNo and I needed the words XD and 2) If you look at the letter on the phone, it spells 55-LOSER. But, I guess it is a waste of space. Thanks again!

Thanks!