I really like this work, it captures a feeling a am very intimately aware of.  I like how you capture the dichotomy of change, it is both fascinating and terrifying.  I think you wrote that out very well.  I also liked how you left space after your first stanza, I think it captures the mood of the poem very well, it also helps set a pace that is tentative but consistent.  One thing I did not really like was the last line.  I like the idea but the language is kind of awkward, maybe if you moved so so that the line says, 'I am so scared and I am free' or something like that.  Where it is it just sounds a bit awkward.  Other than that kudos, this is a good piece!

What a great poem! Very interesting subject matter. I really liked your form in this poem, with the large gap between the first and second stanzas. It exemplifies the "sinking" that opened the poem. I have a few suggestions that I think will help the flow of the poem. First I would take out "Down" at the beginning of the second line. This is because the word is used again immediately in the fourth line, which is a bit distracting for the reader. Also, I think "down" is implied if you were to just say 'Sinking. Into a field of nothing". I would also recommend changing "can't" in the second line of stanza two to "cannot". This makes the line a clean 8 syllable line (even numbered syllabic lines always sound better to me while reading, for some reason). I also think it fits in better with the general diction of the poem.

My only question:

Holding onto a nothing life.

I'm not sure what this line means. Maybe you can expand it a bit to show your meaning. I think there's great potential there!

I thought you had some wonderful imagery, particularly in the third stanza.

No longer broken by old wounds

I am healing now

That was one of my favorite lines! Just excellent writing.

As for stanza five; I felt the way it was writing was strikingly different from the rest of the poem, enough for it to be a bit distracting as a reader. I would suggest re-visiting that one. Perhaps something like this:

"I hold my breath. For the first time, I look up. Am blinded by the light." Just to make it fit better with the rest of the poem. Also, I think the end of stanza five is great. So much so that I would suggest eliminating stanza six and just ending the poem with five. I think it is a much more effective ending.

Keep up the great work!