I still need to write my FFFF. Busy week at work and out of it for a change.

Man, you're a critiquing machine! I'm glad you liked that story. The last time I even looked at MegaTokyo was about 2002 I think, so if I got anything from that it was dredged from my subconscious. That or both Piro and I stole it from Serial Experiments LAIN, where she does the (almost) nekkid computing thing quite a bit. As an aside, I'm a little amused that you don't like "walked his mind" but are okay with "ran"

Thanks for those comments on Think! It was initially going to be a sort of introductory chapter to get people interested before jumping into the story. I never got around to writing it, though.

*agrees with Stewart*

Thanks for your critique of The Newly Edited Man! Just as an aside, the British spelling is in fact "pyjamas".

thanks for your critique, geek--!

Thanks for the critiques, Geek! I was really surprised to see someone critique "Samuel" the day after it was archived - made my day, actually! A lot of what you said was true, and I'll keep it all in mind for both rewrites. Thanks again!

hmm...I seem to be on a misunderstanding streak. That makes more sense anyway. It's a good story.

hi, geek!
thanks for the super critique of my cowgirl werewolf story! lots of solid advice there--i'll refine with your suggestions in mind. i'm glad you enjoyed it.

Thanks for the critique of Fireborn. I didn't even notice the capitalization issues with Salamander. I appreciate all your advice.
-Ben

Thanks for your critique! You're right, I did forget to finish that dialogue. Oops! According to Wikipedia (where I got 95% of the facts for this story, whee!) "Mercury Control in Florida" I'll go edit some of the changes you suggested in. Thanks again!

you're welcome! my pleasure, geek. looking forward to the satire.

Thanks for your critique on "Do unto others". I'm guilty of ; and : abuse. They're just such sexy punctuation

Thanks for the critique, I really appreciate the feedback. I agree that that pacing is slow, and I'll definitely work on that. Short-shorts should read like an after-dinner mint, I think, be refreshing without taking too long to get down. Also, with the apostrophe-s possession thing, I usually follow the Strunk and White for grammar conventions, with says *always* use and apostrophe-s for possession, even when the noun ends in s, except for historical names, like Jesus' or Moses'. I don't know if this is right or not, but I've asked a lot of English professors and have never been able to get consensus about the proper way.

Thanks again, I really appreciate it!

Thanks for your critique! The "taking out her smile" thing was purposeful, but if it doesn't work I'll go back and fix it. I agree with the description of JJJS1. I left it too late and was suddenly like "Crap, I haven't even mentioned him."

Thanks for the crit of Recluse. Most of my revision is spent untangling my naturally convoluted writing, so I think you were right one with your suggestions.

-Ben

hey, geek--
thanks for your feedback! i can see where you're coming from with the cluttered feel. i'll take your comments with me when i rework this sucker. thanks again!

Thanks for the critique of Disc Love! I'll be sure to incorporate your advice!

groovy--i'm glad to hear it! she's a sweetheart. thanks also for adding me to your favorites list! very cool!

hi, geek--
(gee, i feel funny saying that.)
thanks for your critique of 'automated systems, inc'! i'm glad you liked it and decided to post your comments, even after the system thwarted you the first time.
(hmmm...makes you wonder, doesn't it? )

Hello Geek,
Welcome back. Thanks for the crit of MSI. I appreciate the feedback.

I hope you'll stick around for awhile.

-Ben

Hey!

Thanks so much for your critique of Facsimile!

-Natalie

wow bc that is gene like exactly from outlaw star...strange.

hey i saw your profile pic..i love outlaw star lol. Just wanted to say hi.

Hey GeeK,

Back atchya on the pad, and looking forward to more (2 Chapters of my beast up now, check it out)...B. well...J.A.T

Hey Geek,

Thanks for making me your first Critique. The ending of Eternal Sunset (I hate that title) is supposed to indicate that the sun is dying and therefore no longer has the power to kill him. As for the other ways to die, I guess I assumed that it would be impossible to decapitate oneself and I never heard of fire before. Thanks for pointing out these issues. If the ending is not working then the story's not working. I appreciate your time.

-Ben