I just saw and copied the great list of contemporary authors you made in the book forum. Thank you so much for doing so! So thoughtful and a great idea.

amazingly I am still behind on your story! looking forward to waht is coming next! have a grt day Tom!

hey tom
just back to scrib after a bit of a break, I see i have some reading to do! looking forward to getting thru the chapters I ahve missed while gone!

Thanks - hope you had a happy Easter also. Let us not forget what Easter is all about.

Thanks for your added thoughts - as usual, you've been insightful!

I revised chapter 2 - take a look if you have time!

I never thought about it much until I started teaching creative writing to teens. They seem to prefer a first person narrator who talks directly to the reader. I've tried to get them to do less telling, but it's hard.

Thanks for your critique! The issue you bring up is one I've been mulling over. I read a lot of young adult fantasy, and see this quite often. So I'm thinking about it, and your comments are most helpful.
dax

Hey Tom,

Thanks again for the read. Excellent suggestions all of them! I've posted a response to a few points in the comments. Thanks! CT

Tom,
Thank you for the careful and thorough review. My brain is fried tonight, but when I have a chance to revise this piece, your comments will be helpful.

Many thanks,

SE