Maybe you should check out the critique tutorials so you could provide a little more constructive feedback. I read you critique again to try to pull something out of it, but, it was difficult. Almost 1,000 words and not much to help me. Perhaps use the template next time. Where is your writing? You gonna publish something?

I for sure agree with the 'sunset' part though! Thanks for letting me know! I wrote it at work at about 4 in the am, so, yeah, anyways...

wow! I just read your critique of Abysmal and it was quite entertaining. So thanks. Yeah, I wasn't expecting the best reviews for that but I decided to post it anyways. I'm not really sure what you were talking about the whole time, but thanks anyways! I'll make some adjustments...

uiji; if I could, I would critique your critiques. All are entertaining. Waiting with anticipation to see what you do when you write in your own voice.

Hi uiji,

Welcome to scribophile! Glad to see you jumped right in with a critique. Don't stop now! Looking forward to seeing what your writing is like.