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On Freezing light, by Alexander Semenyuk: It's an interesting poem, and I thank you for sharing. However,
I kind of found it pretentious and dull - although, I mig... » Read more...
On A Fixed Match, by Kieran Thomson: First of all, I respect the novel and creative form you
took with the piece. It's interesting, to say the least, an... » Read more...
On Untitled, by Ben Jacobson: I enjoyed the piece and, like a few of the other people have
mentioned, the concept is impressive. It reminds me of the Twili... » Read more...
On Maybe You've Heard Of It, by Carlos Perez: This was a very powerful piece, and you did the subject matter
justice, to say the least. However, I did notice a few flaws h... » Read more...
On Burn Cigarette, Burn, by Joey D.T.: The piece is interesting, and I think you have a real knack for
this poetry stuff!
In the first sentence, you need the word &... » Read more...
On This Morning I'm Crying Over a Girl I Don't Even Know, by Jackie Dean Godsey: The formatting for your piece here is frustrating and
infuriating - it really is a drag on the eyes. The piece, however... » Read more...
On Childhood Reviews, by Joey D.T.: Joey D.T., I really enjoy your poem posted above entitled
'Childhood Review'. Here on Scribophile, I like to review p... » Read more...
On Punk Pop is so '05, Chapter 2, by sheena parasite.: Hey, another great addition! I noticed a few errors here and
there though.
For the first line, I would say 'we were getti... » Read more...
On Monotony, by Dear Daisy: What a brilliant and concise way to mock the conventions of
usual poetry. I don't feel the title fits the poem, and the w... » Read more...
On DAMAGED GOODS!, by Miguel Crane: Well, this piece definately had quite a bit
of emotion tied to it, and you can sense it in the word choice... » Read more...
On Butterfly, by Dear Daisy: Much better, although it was an impressive piece in the first
place! Thanks for letting me know you fixed it up.
... » Read more...
On Punk Pop is so '05, Chapter 1: Try Not To Argue, by sheena parasite.: It was an interesting piece, and I enjoyed it. However, I did
notice a few problems here and there.
Don't use a hyphen in... » Read more...
On Treat You Right (A Love Song), by Kay Tor: What a wacky coincidence - I just finished up
watching the 1991 movie, 'The Silence of the Lambs',... » Read more...
On Sidewalk Situation, by Traci S: I'm a man,
therefore I might not be the ideal audience for this here poe... » Read more...
On Butterfly, by Dear Daisy: Very interesting piece, and it's always great to hear insight on
someone's tattoo! The piece flowed very well.
I don&... » Read more...
On My blank page, by J Charles Silko: I enjoyed the concept, even if it's been done. You put a fresh
spin on it, and you have a knack for vocabulary.
I d... » Read more...
On The Molester, by Debbie Kerr: I'm so sorry to hear about the burden your family went through.
The piece was well-written and captivating. I'm pleas... » Read more...
On Goats go to Hell, by Shannon Wardrop: I think the way you set up the piece with the
single-sentence paragraphs addressing the paragraph is a bit
cliche, and ... » Read more...
On bent, Chapter 2, by Aaron Moritz: You certainly have a knack for conversation and I was immersed
in it. One thing though - don't use 'drugs' or ... » Read more...
On A Fine Line, by Casey Criswell: The story did indeed actually feel like I was having an intimate
dinner or coffee-break with the main character. However, I f... » Read more...
On Goodbye, by Alex Jestin Taylor: You are a fantastic writer, and I enjoyed the way you pieced
this poem. It wasn't clumsy and I could really feel what you... » Read more...
On fight off your demons, by Aaron Moritz: I think it's got potential. The writing was a bit hard to read
because of the spacing but I dont believe thats your fault... » Read more...
On TOWELS, by penpa: This poem says quite a lot with very little.
After reading the
poem a few times, I... » Read more...
On The Moment of Doom, by Crocolyle: You have a knack for description and detail. I enjoyed reading
it, and I thank you for putting it up here.
... » Read more...