Thank you for your critique. I really appreciate it. You offered a lot of helpful information. You seemed to understand where I was coming from when many people didn't. Thank you very much!!

Hello Vincent.

Thank you for the critique of Not Pictured. You are absolutely right about the pacing problems. I've been attempting flash fiction and I usually end up just squashing a regular short story to fit into the space. I haven't much considered altering voice to match the scene. It's an interesting idea. I'll have to try it out.

Thanks Again,
-Ben