Hey! I am lazy so I am holding off on critiquing until i can be a critique bulldozer and actually have smart things to say. But I figured I should respond to your critique on my poem. To be honest, it wasn't inspired at all by a person....I was playing around with my friend's mac and you know how macs have voices that will read text outloud? Well, I put the most outrageous thing I could think of on there, and decided it was poem worthy.

Hey, I meant to leave a note earlier to thank you for your critique, I've just been real busy. I haven't even had time to edit the story. I am going to rewrite it, though, into a chaptered short story. I seem to do better with those. On other writing sites I'm on, a one chaptered short story is called a 'one-shot.' I've written maybe two good ones, but I usually end up rewriting them into chaptered short stories. Anyway, I did want to stop in and say thank you, so thanks! ^_^