On Clarity, by Jaya Huprikar:  I don't know much about poetry and even less about haiku, but I liked reading the work you did here. And I don'... » Read more...

On Alleymen, by Jack McFie:  I very much like this work.  Some of it has me a bit befuddled but all in all I think I understand, so let me para... » Read more...

On Digging for Potatoes, by J.K. Lynn:  This is very good work.  I really thought it was written by someone who served and was a prisoner in WWII until I ... » Read more...

On Breath of Life, by Laurie Paulsen: Opening Comments   Good work. Plot  This is what I learned from reading your first two pages.  Brian is s... » Read more...

On Rose Rising, Chapter 1, by Laurie Paulsen:  Wow.  This is the kind of book I am always looking for at the book sales, the library or Barnes & Noble. You b... » Read more...

On The House at the end of the Lane, by Debbie Kerr:  This is a fine piece of writing.   You've captured wonderful character descriptions in your snapshots.&nb... » Read more...

On Taking Time, by Eli Hart:  I like this poem too.  It's got a nice rhythm to it and I like the sentiment.  The poem reminds me of my ... » Read more...

On Because of You, by Lilli: This work is lovely. It is a beautiful song of unending praise (for those of us who hold faith) and a wonderful tha... » Read more...

On Musings (working title), Chapter 1, by Fainne Grant:   I think your rewrite of the proglogue is very good.  I enjoyed reading it.  You've taken away much of th... » Read more...

On Immortal Child, Chapter 1: Playing Games, by Phedre: Good grief, this whole is so unsettling!    My only thought - because the comments I ... » Read more...

On Even My Dust, by William Craig:   Yes, I agree very romantic.  I was taken with the line   but even my dust will love you  very crea... » Read more...

On Always Room for Jello, by Phedre:  On my honor, I will never again eat jello or use gelatin powder to make a fruit salad again.  I learned ... » Read more...

On Fate or Faith?, by scholar:  Well done.  You questions are fundamental.  I am reminded of  Doubting Thomas; he who did not belie... » Read more...

On Void, by dreamchaser:   Your work captures the feeling of lonliness that I all experience from time to time. I'm  glad you foun... » Read more...

On Musings (working title), Chapter 1, by Fainne Grant:  You have an interesting beginning here. With the descriptive words you are using to describe your MC's  't... » Read more...

On Red Meat, by Michael Bermudez: Opening Comments  What  a tale!   I didn't find it difficult to dislike Harold.  I thought Glor... » Read more...

On When Friends Return, by Aleki Suibhne:  Oh yes!   I like this rewrite.  Now I get it!   You've provided her with the will to ... » Read more...

On When Friends Return, by Aleki Suibhne: I read this piece several times.  Your heroine and her recurrent illness strike a chord with me, especially the followin... » Read more...

On Poddle Stumper, by Ben Jacobson:  I appreciate the O'Henry surprise ending you have written.   I will never go out to view t... » Read more...

On A Fixed Match, by Kieran Thomson:  Wow, this is strong stuff.  I was a little taken aback by the first few lines; perhaps a couple too many dashes fo... » Read more...

On Good-bye Papa, by Louise Kuskovski:   My daughter's husband died last summer leaving two very young children (ages 3 and 1).  Reading this work bro... » Read more...